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About Me Official Beta Tester Pseudo-Intellectual Jules17/Female/United States Recent Activity Deviant for 2 Years
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Goodnight Saigon -Part One-

The rest of the story, a romance set in Vietnam in the late 1960s, can be found in my gallery. :aww:

Won =bekkia's Tell Me a Story Contest, 2009. Woo!

Critiques

Mark   
Your love and lies to me  Were a sweat wine.  
And I, your alcoholic,  Giddy with intoxication.   
As all unhealthy habits must end,  So must this.  I must clear my head of you  And walk a straight line into my future.   
But how do I give up  My truest love?  The love that comforts me,  The love that dashes me to pieces.  
 
You say I am strong.  Here’s my strength:  To leave you behind  And carry on happily,       Without you.
To Mark
by =january77

First stanza: Your love and lies to me Were a sweat wine. I absolutely love the image of "sweat wine." It's strong, it evokes em...

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You there, painting the colours and the shapes  You there, upon the gilded stage  You there, with the rings around your eyes  You there, turning the darkness into starlight   
Will you dream for me?  Will you dream for me?   
You there, painting the colours and the shapes  You there, putting it all on crackly tape  You there, with the rings around your eyes  You there, you know what is wrong and right   
Writing,  Writing dreams on the walls  Waiting,  Waiting for the toll of the bells  Wanting,  Wanting nothing more than to stay asleep  Knowing, &n
Writing Dreams On the Walls
by =Vindicta38

Hey there! I noticed some things about this song I thought I could help you improve, so I figured I'd write you a little critique...

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If only my bone-white heart were granite  like your eyes,  your ordinary brown, liquid orbs of malice.  You tell me you love me,  surely you mean my suicide  or a crowd-pleasing standing ovation.  Your voice  wishes it were cyanide,  but I mop it up without gloves  and my skin is only slightly irritated,  cracked and peeled at the knuckles  as I am ripe and harvested for such tortures.   
This is evolution.  My meat hangs tighter to my skeleton with every season.  I have learned to adapt, and what has not,  well those parts  are maggot-filled,  schl
Sean - 5
by *vespera

First off, I thought this poem had very great impact. It was the charged language, the words like "malice," "cyanide," "tortures," "sk...

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Caught.

Journal Entry: Sun Oct 25, 2009, 11:24 AM
I am embarrassed.

I was caught escaping.

She told she knew what I was doing, and that I had to stop. That she loved me.

All right, then. I can do that.

On a lighter note, love lives are terribly exciting. :aww:

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  • Mood: Sweet
  • Listening to: Bob Dylan
  • Reading: is a songwriter,
  • Watching: not a poet.
  • Playing: Lay,
  • Eating: lady,
  • Drinking: Lay.
Skin by `ginkgografix

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My life is pretty much equal to college application frenzy right now.

And therefore I'm pretty boring.

But hopefully that'll clear up and I'll be fascinating soon - not quite so typical of my age. What a nice change. :aww:

Devious Info

  • Current Residence: Mississippi
  • deviantWEAR sizing preference: L
  • Print preference: any and all! beautiful work!
  • Interests: Writing, arguing... especially when I don't have a valid point, and stage acting.
  • Favourite movie: When Harry Met Sally, The Fall, White Oleander, STAR TREK, Hedwig and the Angry Inch
  • Favourite band or musician: Ella Fitzgerald, Keane, Au Revoir Simone
  • Favourite genre of music: Jazz, alternative
  • Favourite artist: Paul Delaroche, Gianlorenzo Bernini, Sophia Leonard :]
  • Favourite poet or writer: Janet Fitch, Neil Gaiman,
  • Favourite style of art: poetry, narrative fiction
  • MP3 player of choice: iPhone? Go Apple.
  • Favourite cartoon character: Skeeter Valentine! Honk honk!
  • Personal Quote: "My computer spazzed out, so I went to get a potato and now Messenger won't work."
  • Tools of the Trade: Microsoft Office 2007
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Your sexuality? 

61%
14 deviants said Straight. (female)
26%
6 deviants said Bisexual. (female)
9%
2 deviants said Straight. (male)
4%
1 deviant said Gay. (male)
0%
No deviants said Bisexual. (male)
0%
No deviants said Gay. (female)
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Comments


:icontigerpusen05:
~tigerpusen05 Aug 26, 2009, 2:33:20 PM
Thanks for the fav! =)

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White rabbits grant your wishes, you know.
:iconsoporous:
~soporous Aug 22, 2009, 7:06:53 AM
Found you on the Tell Me a Story contest, am commencing watching. And reading your Goodnight Saigon story.
:iconwaltz-with-me:
=Waltz-With-Me Aug 22, 2009, 8:59:37 AM
You should really stick your name somewhere on your dA page so I could go, "Oh, hi, [insert name], am I the only one in the dark that we go to the same school?" ;P

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:iconsoporous:
~soporous Aug 22, 2009, 12:31:16 PM
:iconitisamystery:

:lol: Why, hello there, Jules. It's Anna of the clown essay.
:iconwaltz-with-me:
=Waltz-With-Me Aug 22, 2009, 2:26:40 PM
P.S. How is your weekend going?

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:iconsoporous:
~soporous Aug 22, 2009, 4:43:23 PM
My weekend's been fairly relaxed, but with the threat of Trig make-up test(s) on Monday. I've been able to drink hot tea, consume an unhealthy amount of bread, and wear even more horribly unflattering clothes than I wear at school. :D

I need to get around to persuading my mother to buy me `queenhrosie's book, though. :paranoid: As a late birthday present. Or something.

How is yours?
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